Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image
Here, the author is putting light on one of the major concern of the society. Appealing image may help to conquer the mountain but will not help to survival.That is, we are able to get the required position in the society using the appealing image but real image will help us to acquire position in people's heart.
Society accepts the individual if he acts the way they want, and here comes the role of appealing image. As a result of this, many professions are focusing more on appealing image rather that the actual one.They intentionally focus on what people want and accordingly create an image that grab the attention of the target audience. For example, there is a huge difference between what the politician said and his deeds. Similarly, actors also judged on their reel life than real life. For example, Actor Neil Patrick Harris, who had played a popular role of casanova in the TV series "How I Mate Your Mother" is a homosexual in real life. There are many such examples that depict this lament truth of the society.
In this technologically enhanced society, Social Media also plays a vital role in creating an image of the person. Many Companies shortlist the candidates based on their profile on social medias like LinkedIn, Instagram, Twitter, Facebook. Not only this, the social media profile is also considered for marriage proposals. People think that the social media image of the person is his real image. People don't know the person behind the profile, but they form a image using the individual activities on social media. Thus it is very easy to fool the people around you using the fake image on social media.
But as we all know that, Beauty lies in the eye of the beholder. Even though people are able to get success in acquiring a position in the society using the fake image, it didn't last for long. So don't try to appease the society by using the fake image. Focus on your good qualities and make people love you the way you are rather than the way they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, may, similarly, so, thus, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 352.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72443181818 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42584859641 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514204545455 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.9860783088 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3888888889 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212886588712 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061560643443 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706680747166 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123043333346 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635624708206 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.