"Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image."
In a society where communication through social media has become a valuable skill, it is not remarkable that social profiles get a high social status. The internet however, does not see faces, but only written text, that can be thought about for days. In this way images can be created that not necessarily represent the person behind the computerscreen typing it. because likes and followers are immediatly linked to fame and money, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
The first thing companies do when they receive a job application is google that persons name, look at his/her facebook, twitter, instagram and other social profiles. this has become a routine that replaces the first impression one can make by entering the room for a job interview. The person about to hire you already knows more about you than you could possibly think. if you wear tattoos, piercings or long hair as a man, you wouldn't be the first one who didn't get hired because of superficial prejudices about these, before you even get the chance to show them your true self. therefore it is important you keep a positive image about yourself on the internet.
this of course implies that one should take all social profiles with a grain of salt. but it gives people the opportunity again to show you what they really are made of when you meet them face to face. In the end, one cannot disguise him/herself from who he/she really is. therefore the creation of appealing images might not be so bad after all. this way we will always start a conversation with a positive feeling about that person, allowing us to make our own judgement.
Despite this own judging, one should not forget that the human mind is easily fooled and that right now it has become more of a quest to create the most appealing image, only deteriorating the situation. people want to appear more and more appealing to outclass their relatives and friends. this sometimes results in Facebook-wars and cyber-bullying. The internet has become a world on its own, and people can be bullied in real life, but be almighty in their cyber-world. A healthy mix of both worlds would be best for all of us, but the real world is where the interactions will need to happen eventually.
In sum, we can say that to a certain extent, creating appealing images has its good points, since it gives strangers the benefit of the doubt when you meet them, allowing you to form your own judgement. however, this social hyping is taking immense proportions which creates new, more severe problems our society will have to face. therefore one should read every social profile with a little doubt, postponing judgement untill a meeting with that person in real life happens. if you agree with this opinion, please "like" this message.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, after all, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84979423868 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57508705598 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534979423868 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6267897786 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.47826087 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1304347826 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21739130435 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163936215527 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544208234796 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973867454424 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10357827031 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088158707085 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.