"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The above given argument asserts that athletic competitions like youth-league sports should be discontinued for children below nine years of age in Parkville.He went on supporting his claim by refering to a study where youth-league soocer players in several major cities are interviewed have reported more psychological pressure from coaches and parents to win competition.However,the argument has some inherent flaws that need to be logically analysed before making the given conclusion.
Firslty,it is given that more than 40,000 players who are children of age below age 9 years suffered injuries in youth league sports but there is no statisitcs provided on the total number participated in the competition.Furthermore,the youth league soccer players who are part of the study reported high psychological pressure are from several major cities depicts the logical flaw that the author assumed similar conditions in Parkville.Moreover,it is also not known whether the people who were interviewed as part of study are of same age group or not which again casts doubt on the study.
Second,the author completely ignored the possiblity of negligence from authorities who conducted the youth league games responsible for providing all necessary facilities,arrangements and precautions to be taken as it is a major event.This could have substantial impact on paticipants as they could be in large numbers and any minor mistake could result in large number of injuries.Therefore,this helps in making the conclusion even weaker and author's argument as baseless.
Moreover,it is concluded in the argument that the organised competitions should be discontinued only for children of age below nine years raises another doubt.It clearly depicts the correlation between age of the participants and competition which is logically absurd.It could be same with any other player with any age above nine years.So, author completely gone out of the logical track in making that recomendation.
To conclude,the argument failed to provide good evidence for the conclusion it provides as the provided information or facts to support the argument are not strong enough to provide base for that conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1827 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.205 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.845 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 58.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.393 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.502 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.908 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, moreover, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6036036036 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.63509017044 2.78398813304 131% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525525525526 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 22.8473053892 289% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 127.661113891 57.8364921388 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 373.2 119.503703932 312% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.6 23.324526521 286% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.8 5.70786347227 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281453703254 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152056584138 0.0743258471296 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107348635171 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152056584138 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107348635171 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 38.2 14.3799401198 266% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -12.43 48.3550499002 -26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 12.197005988 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.09 12.5979740519 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.85 8.32208582834 130% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.4 11.1389221557 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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