The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper."Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered inju

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.

"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In the passage, the editor of the parkville Daily newspaper states that the education experts advice to discontinue the athletic competitions for the children. The experts states that this competition are leading child to waste the time that should be invested in studies. however, there are certain flaws in this passage.

Firstly, the experts state that there are 40000 young players suffered from the injury. however there is no proof given to back this premise. also they have not stated how many players were competing in the league? In physical sports, it is certain that sometimes players get injured. In the competition where the people are competing to win, the people are enthusiastic to do whatever they can to win. In such zeal, the players sometimes get injured because they are passive to everything else then victory. therefore, unless this injury frequency is not much high than usual, this can not conclude that the parkville should stop the organization of the youth league.

Secondly, the passage suggests that the several big city children were interviewed. it was discovered that the parents and coaches put psychological pressure on them to win. however, the passage fails to state some important measures. For example, that how many children were interviewed? also they interviewed only major cities. that means they have not interviewed small town and other rural areas. so this study can not prejudice that the situation of children are same everywhere. so this study might not be enough to conclude that the youth league should be stoped.

Moreover, the passage suggests that the practice sessions take away the time that could be used in academic activities. however this premise neglects that children cannot study 24 hours. what if the students are investing their leisure time in the sports activity? what if the children want to make their career in the sports? Not all the children are studious. And also sports activities are important to youth. These sports also teach them many life lessons like teamwork. Hence, complete banishment of sports activity is not the right thing to do.

therefore, the passage fails to support the conclusion due to several flaws. The experts can not conclude to discontinue the youth league on the bases of the premise without any proof to support them. they should also take merits of such sports activity into account.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15345268542 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51170427564 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496163682864 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0113707043 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.4827586207 119.503703932 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.4827586207 23.324526521 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.72413793103 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101767104553 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277170906845 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030655328483 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559333802101 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205766014421 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1948 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.982 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.419 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5