"Ten years ago our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two regions. The buildings were erected by different construction companies — Alpha and Zeta. Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, tat building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's. In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the argument suggests that the construction company zeta is better than alpha and so recommends zeta firm for new building construction.this claim is supported by providing information that regional headquarters constructed by zeta firm has lower maintenance than alpha one even though the construction cost is on higher side.also,it is provided that staff of zeta is more stable with less employee turnover than alpha.The data provided in the argument is limited in the context of corroborating the conclusion made by the author and need to be examined by profound approach.
Firstly,it is given in the argument that there is comparison of buildings built by zeta and alpha which were built 10 years ago.The author makes use of this comparison and makes decision in selecting the firm for construction of new building.it is very much possible that situation 10 years ago can be different from today.also,there is no information on the regions where the buildings are constructed.it might turn out that building constructed by zeta is situated in a region where the maintenance is easy because of the weather conditions or any other factors which could not be the case with building built by alpha.also,usually the maintenance charges include the charges for labor and materials used.Furthermore,it ultimately depends upon the people who utilise the building.If the building constructed by alpha is not well taken care of such that it had resulted in high maintenance costs.
Moreover,the author indicated the stability of staff in zeta and considered it as a better choice.this is because that it has less employee turnover than alpha.this could actually be weakening the author's stance as less employee turn over could also mean there is less scope for new talent in the firm.Same people with same ideas could not get success all the time. this indicates that there is less chance for new employees to be inducted into the staff who could also bring new innovative ideas.
Next,the author also mentioned about the power consumption of the buildings where the building of alpha is on higher side than zeta. there is no information provided regarding stats of power consumption monthly or yearly by both buildings.also it could be possible that the fare of electriciy may be higher in the region where building of alpha is situated.
To conclude,this argument seems to make valid recommendation at initial glance but careful analysis of the reasons provided by the author doesnot provide enought support which need to be examined as in the above provided discussion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2141 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.979 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.833 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 61.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.767 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.476 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.754 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21822541966 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10237427116 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47242206235 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 22.8473053892 258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 262.091431312 57.8364921388 453% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 310.857142857 119.503703932 260% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.5714285714 23.324526521 255% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.5714285714 5.70786347227 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239055805128 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111792081155 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853158637379 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128531120008 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928350011506 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.9 14.3799401198 229% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 48.3550499002 24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.197005988 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.1389221557 230% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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