Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
In the short time, creating an appealing image is more important than the reality or truth behind that image. however, people will pay more attention to the truth of the image in the long period. therefore, it is untenable to define which factor is more essential without considering the specific issues.
it is necessary to build up appealing images of issues during a short-time period. In the field of literature, the sales of book-publishing almost depend on the authors’ reputation and popularity. The romantic and illusive genres could be better to spur students’ reading interests and engender better sales such as novels of Guo Jingming. Most of his fans are teenagers, who are naïve and would like to pursue the romantic future. Meanwhile, in politics, the public would like to support those have charisma and eloquence to be the leaders. Herbert hoover was chosen to be the president of America during the Depression by making absorbing commitments: on the ground of satisfying physical demands such as provided sufficient food and offered more jobs, he promised to give more general welfare for the civils.
Even if the short-term appealing images could have positive influence on some aspects, it cannot benefit for the long-term development. although hoover wined the election and to be the president, his failure of Laissez-faire ended his political career eventually. therefore, the leaders’ contributions towards the nation during the tenure are more important than the short-term charming personalities. Besides, in arts, van Gogh, on the basis of Monet’s impressionism, he added factors of feeling and emotion to highlight color and light. His post impressionism produced a new creative painting style, but his works didn’t attain the public admits until now. although van Gogh’s works transcended the basic rules of the social rules he lived, it didn’t preclude his creativity to be found in the future. could people can still say that appealing image is more important? Probably not.
In a nutshell, it is important to build up a short-term appealing image to attract attention from the public. however, from a long-term perspective, the truth behind the image could create deep permanent effects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 354.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39265536723 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00725950901 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564971751412 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0310956526 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.055555556 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247986115331 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873063971191 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148985750561 0.0758088955206 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195542214261 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148842263865 0.0667264976115 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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