These days, there is a trend where people usually create fake images by using an illustrated application or hiding their truth to be better looking. It feels like they are more concerned about being loved than showing the truth. In my opinion, while I mostly agree with this argument, I still have an opinion against it.
To begin, this trend is influenced by a group of idols or influencers, and this has a lot of effects on making appealing images. We can see that most influencers have more extra benefits than normal people, such as the ability to make more money per hour. They could earn more than 100 dollars per hour, whereas a pharmacist gets an average of only 10 dollars per hour. Because of this advantage, more people try to become influencers. The first thing that they have to do to become an idol is to make themselves more appealing. They, however, do not care how to make themselves look better and do not pay much attention to the importance of self-improvement. To be more specific, they could just use an illustrated program, which makes it easier to make attractive images than to develop them themselves. That is why people love creating fake appeals.
In addition, my previous argument will not be true if people do not give value to appealing to someone. In other words, it is widely accepted that in our society, people love better-looking guys more than normal ones. A simple example of this is that people vote for a slim girl in a pageant competition more than a chubby girl. It is not only about appearance; it is sometimes about gender. We can see that many transgender people are not respected enough to be in powerful positions like government officers. Some of them have to keep this secret to be in that position. The perspective, therefore, also influences hiding the truth about someone and creating a falsified image.
Nevertheless, an appealing image is not everything, as, for example, many stages of pageant competitions try to encourage the 'real me' in their campaign. Some people just realize that the value of anyone is not their image, and they try to raise this awareness in our society; however, the competition still has some kind of beautiful content to compete with, such as a catwalk in a swimsuit. The one who is not good-looking enough is still eliminated from the stage. Therefore, the true value of people, or the 'real me' slogan, is just beginning.
In conclusion, although our society tends to be fake by hiding the truth from each other, there is a start to not judging anyone by their cover. While I believe that our community will be affected by the influence of appealing for a while from now on, I hope people may move toward the latter and eventually find the true value of a person.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71991701245 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69304275795 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49377593361 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2386585965 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7916666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154686506894 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445868070311 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371155657495 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866589276618 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474387507434 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71991701245 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69304275795 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49377593361 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2386585965 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7916666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154686506894 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445868070311 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371155657495 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866589276618 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474387507434 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.