The university education give several courses for students who are pursuing their dream. Especially, the university education aims to serve curriculum to cultivate experts of the various fields. However, in virtue of its high tuition, many students are deprived of the chances to enter university. So that the issue about the government's support for university of education needs to be considered seriously.
In case that the government support selectively for students who are suffering financial difficulty, the university education free of charge would be beneficial both for the society as whole and for individuals. The free university education can contribute to actualize the value of equality in education. For example, by supporting tuition which is normally considerably expensive for the students who are in destitute condition, the government can grant the opportunity of high level of education which would be impossible without the acid. And this opportunity of education plays important role in enhancing happiness of individuals, owing to the fact that the university education works as salient ground for future success. Furthermore, it is eventually advantageous for the whole society, because with this monetary support, diverse students who have great potentiality but are suffering difficulty can have chances to be well educated, and it leads to generate good human resource pool which is necessary for the progress of the society. For instance, Kim Buseong, who is renown business man of Korea, had been helped by government for university, so that he could be a figure who gives huge positive effect on the society.
However, even though the scholarship provided for students who are in poor condition is laudable, the attempt to introduce the university education system operated without any tuition should not be accepted. Because it is not realistic. If the government take responsibility for all tuition needed to run university education, the burden of the government will be as huge as impossible to deal with. It is not practical as well. If the government pay all the tuition so that the university education becomes free of charge, then many students who do not need to take university education will attend the university courses. It is harmful for the economy of society as well, because the students could work in other fields rather than sitting in the university while consuming the government's budget.
All in all, the university education should not be free of charge. It is not realistic and practical. However, for individuals and society both, the system to help students who are in destitute condition should be operated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...out any tuition should not be accepted. Because it is not realistic. If the government ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3539192399 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97432323377 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475059382423 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6503474496 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.631578947 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2084684261 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848600373811 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818545581526 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164646262573 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391234655409 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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