The value of money should be instilled into youngsters since childhood because social success is defined by the amount of money one has.
The proponent states that the value of money should be instilled into youngsters since childhood because social success is defined by the amount of money one has. Though, one might find this statement to be true but social success does not depend entirely on money. My views on the above mentioned statement are given below.
First, it is essential that children are taught the value of money since their childhood. Childhood is the phase where a child can be moulded to become a good human being by imparting the child with different values. For an instance, child belonging from a rich background might become a prodigal in his adulthood. On the other hand, child belonging to weak economical background will be cautious with money in his future as he knows the value of each penny. So it is momentous that one needs to inculcate such values in their child since the childhood.
Second, social success implies that how is a person percieved by his/her colleagues in the society. Though it is correct to say that the person with higher amount of money will be given respect but the respect does not entirely depends on money. For instance, a rich person who is crass with his colleagues or does not treat waiter with respect will surely be hated and will not be respected in the society. So social success does not depends only on amount of money one has but also other values like bussiness ethics, integrity , honesty, etc.
To sum it up, the value of money should definitely be instilled into youngsters since childhood but one should not forget to inculcate other values too. A child who has all the values instilled will become a compete human being and will be respected in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 295.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76949152542 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41517668777 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454237288136 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 429.3 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2210394343 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.5 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53753931452 0.243740707755 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208541200625 0.0831039109588 251% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.220823895189 0.0758088955206 291% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.377850023063 0.150359130593 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176840770956 0.0667264976115 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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