The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

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The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In the argument, the speaker states that the well-being of a society is strengthened when a great portion of its people doubt authority. In my opinion, even though a single person’s revolt to the authority could also have a positive influence, more people certainly generate more power, thus always lead to a more effective and larger-scale improvement of humans’ well-being when more people are questioning the authority.

Looking back through the history of scientific field, when people’s ability to investigate various things were still limited, there were many luminous who worked as a single force to question the authority and had made contribution to the well-being of human society. For example, Copernicus, one of the great scientists, refused the orthodoxy idea of his time which believed that the Earth was the centre of the universe. His objection to the geocentric theory and the creation of heliocentric theory have definitely increased human being’s understanding towards the universe and our living environment. However, in recent society, because of the rapidly advancing technology allows scientists to obtain larger amount of and more accurate data before coming to a conclusion, almost all of the authorities in modern society that have established are irrefutable and highly credential. thus when a single voice stands up and come to question the authority will be mostly ignored by the community.

Nevertheless, the case is different when group of people advocate against the mainstream.

back to days, gays and lesbians were being treated as freaks, abnormals. there was a group of art students who painted art pieces related to the theme of homosexuals and the government provided great amount of subsidy to them as a way to constrain their freedom to paint any kinds of works that expresses those ‘heterodoxy’ thoughts and believes that might influence the society. In recent years, to counter the thought of heterosexual as the only normal kind of identifications, large-scale parades had taken place in a great number of countries for supporting homosexual. As a positive result, modern people started to respect each person’s distinctive choice for his or her mate’s sex and an increasing number of countries has begin to legalize marriages between same sex. Absolutely, as an achievement of many people against the authority, the well-being of the society had experienced a great leap by providing human the right to pursue their happiness among same sex, which might seem absurd in the past.

In sum, the speaker’s argument is reasonable. when the majority of people are questioning the authority, it is implicitly showing that the authority is tenuous and thus by revising it, the well-being of a society will certainly be enhanced.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, well, for example, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49318181818 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1806848631 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8574603168 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.133333333 118.986275619 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189071992546 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069174146651 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061564261002 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118608955744 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431485134329 0.0667264976115 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.1392134831 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.7820224719 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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