Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position

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Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position

The statement suggests that nations should pass laws for the conservations of the remaining inhabited areas in their natural state. I strongly agree with the statement. Even though some of those wilderness areas could potentially become an economic centre and be exploited for lucrative purposes, it is also the responsibility of human to protect the planet earth and persevere its natural beauty.

Nowadays, an increasing number of news are reporting about the consistently rising global temperature. one of the main causes for the occurrence of global warming is the carbon dioxide emission. As human’s desire for economic gains gets stronger, we continuously reconstruct the land that used to be a beautiful park into industries and skyscrapers, and try to turn it into a financial district. However, the constant removal of trees and flowers will not only bring a unhealthy living environment for human beings but also will interrupt the balance of the earth.

With increasing number of industries, there will be more carbon dioxide and some toxic elements being emitted into the air, and because the number of trees are also declining, the natural sponge for the carbon dioxide do not exist anymore, thus the quality of the air will be greatly diminished. The possible negative effect that human could bring to the earth by depriving the natural areas, if our planet is capable of supporting human beings, then all of the attempts of developing human society will be meaningless.

Moreover, human beings are not the only creature who live and depend on the earth, the consideration for other animals should also be taken. For example, bee is one of the most important pollinator on the planet. it is responsible for a myriad of things such as flowers and cottons. if the wilderness areas is remove, bees are not able to do their jobs and they will eventually die out. In addition, the habitat for a vast number of animals will be deprived if all of remaining wilderness areas in a nation are rebuild to serve for human. The ecosystem is constructed by linkages between every animal, which means the extinction of one specie will lead to the demise of another. Without those animals, the ecosystem will definitely encounter a great turbulence and it is very possible that the planet earth will not exist anymore.

In sum, humans cannot be too selfish and only consider about their own benefits. All of the actions should be priorly assessed and we should comprehensively evaluate possible consequences that the action might bring.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: One
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Suggestion: an
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...apable of supporting human beings, then all of the attempts of developing human society wi...
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Line 25, column 512, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'rebuilded', 'rebuilt'.
Suggestion: rebuilded; rebuilt
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19570405728 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78285102546 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525059665871 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8782599854 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.944444444 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261124369292 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890195753591 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087445271818 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159571334748 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982555835124 0.0667264976115 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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