Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
In the statement, the speaker asserts that universities should require every student to take a wide range of courses outside the student’s field. In my opinion, even though some disadvantages might be related, the benefits of taking various courses in various fields value more than its negative effects.
when take a variety of courses in fields that students are not specialized in, their spare time will greatly compressed. there are several disadvantages related to this. First of all, the study time available for them to study their major courses might be greatly reduced. it is undeniable that all universities courses have relatively huge workload. thus, when students are forced to also take a number of elective courses, their sleep time might be deprived in order to finish the increased amount of assignments. In some more severe cases, the high pressure due to school work might lead to depression. Only few years before, there was one student who successfully went into one of the top universities in China but unfortunately chose to end his young life in the dorm due to the unmanageable level of stress.
however, the advantages of taking various courses in different field outweighs its drawbacks. Most importantly, university should be a place where students are allow to explore different fields and find out their true interest and life passion. For example, someone might chose economics as her major in the freshman year. however, she found out that the genetics course that she took as her elective was truly compelling for her and she determined to pursue further knowledge in genetics instead of economics. thus, university’s decision to make elective courses compulsory is beneficial when students are still indecisive about their future career. In addition, it is a great way to promote communications between students and extend students’ social circle. some math students can have an opportunity to become friends with others from engineering department. students studying architecture are able to have discussion with students pursuing biology. this interaction between different fields might ignite extraordinary ideas about how the knowledge from one can be utilize in other academic field.
In sum, everything is a double-edged swore and universities should always carefully evaluate their decision towards their academic requirements. there is an old saying goes, study until you are old. study is an endless road and study more will always widen one’s eyesight and university should provide chance for students to explore more about our vast world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, in addition, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50735294118 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91026959535 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3447143092 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382054109352 0.243740707755 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114356300944 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125300901303 0.0758088955206 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248427344076 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112053587787 0.0667264976115 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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