Men and women, because of their inherent physical differences, are not equally suited for many tasks.
In this statement, the speaker asserts that tasks should be different for men and women due to their intrinsic physical disparities. however, in my opinion, this argument is tenuous.
Inherent physical difference is not a fair critique to judge ones’ competence. some people might argue that, men are stronger than women, thus for some works that require mostly strength, men might be more suitable for women. Back in the time, some held the doctrinally idea that women’s only responsibility should be taking care of their family and they should not have their own career. however, especially in recent society, it is noticeable that many women start to working in construction cite, being bus drivers and so on. Twenty-first century is a time where there are no difference between women and men. women also have the right and the freedom to work in the area that traditionally think that is more suitable for men. this is a time where women are proving the world that they are strong and they can be independent.
What’s more, women have shown the society that they are not only have the same physical capacity as the male but their mental strength is also outstanding. Youyou Tu, a well-known female scientist, has dedicated her life to the discovery of treatment to malaria. Her ability to perfectly work with her investigation team and her meticulousness eventually lead her to a success and she was a laureate of the noble prize in the field of physiology. Madam Curie, one of the outstanding scientists in history, spent almost 10 years refining radium. Her perseverance can hardly achieve by any others and this remarkable achievement also brought her a noble prize. there are a rising number of female in each and every field who are proving the fact that being a woman is not a disadvantage and that they are nothing less than a man.
In sum, the speaker’s statement is unjustifiable and most importantly, men and women should be treated equally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 58.6224719101 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07831325301 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85382466397 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557228915663 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5663442562 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.375 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218249589049 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723742814803 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684581911715 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137087641381 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801735284086 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.