Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.

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Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.

In the argument, it asserts that an appealing image has become increasingly significant than the reality or truth behind that image. In my point of view, however, while the appearance might be more important in short term, in the long term, it is not true because only those with meaningful contents behind their outer covers and those that can genuinely bring benefits to society will last and cherish by people.

In short term, there is no deny that whether a product has an appealing image is the prior determinants of whether people are going buy it or not. Companies selling cosmetic products usually spend a great amount of money on packaging and advertisement in order to attract more buyers, which is a reasonable action because there is no way that consumers can see the actual effectiveness of the product after one glance. Thus, those with most compelling descriptions of its function and decent packaging will generate high popularity and large consumer base in short term. Another example could be JingMing Guo, who is a famous Chinese fiction writer. In the past, he published a number of fictions that gained him a huge fan base. While the quality of his recent works has significantly regressed, the sales of those were still high. This situation is also justifiable because his fans simply cannot control their impulsiveness to spend money on things written by Jingming Guo regardless of the quality of his works.

On the contrary, in the long term, people care less about appearance. One Hundred Years of Solitary is a book which remained its high reputation and significance even after so many years of its publish. Since the book involved lots of the writer’s deep emotions and also because of its permanent theme, it is always on the top of readers’ recommendation list. Who would want things that are educational and positively impactful to be neglect? For election in every field, candidates might use appealing but unattainable promises to obtain more votes. Nevertheless, the supports for a leader are only temporary if the leader consistently compromise on his or her promises. For example, a politics who purport to increase the welfare of citizens but didn’t improve the situation at all in long term will eventually engender people’s dissatisfaction and face dismissal from his position. In other words, time works as a filter, where things that are bootless but with attractive appearance will eventually fade out from people’s sight.

In sum, the assertion is too arbitrary and should consider that in long term, image has only minor importance compare with the reality or truth behind that image.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... will last and cherish by people. In short term, there is no deny that wheth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, for example, in short, in other words, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14252873563 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86762973619 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570114942529 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1071317229 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.277777778 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160035440204 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05422012697 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117713280327 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143927439819 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114383164506 0.0667264976115 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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