Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Now-a-days people are getting more influenced by the outward appearance of something rather than what is inside of that. this stinging but veritable phenomenon is becoming obvious day by day. While many might refute the claim that the verisimilitude also exists juxtaposed with the ostentatious facts, I think that the latter is clearly suppressing the former one.
In a world becoming competitive than ever, every single person is vying with one another to prove themselves worth. For this, sometimes they belie their original desire, or achievements to survive in this competition. A silly mistake and he will lag far behind from others. Branding has become a lethal weapon for defeating one's nefarious counterparts in this era of globalization. To illustrate this, politics is a quintessential reference. At the time of campaigning, political rivals enters the field, calumniating one another and showing their own capability. Oftentimes, they do not bother making mendacious promises which may seem appealing to the electorate at first but there remains much skepticism whether or not those words will be kept or retracted. Likewise, everyone is busy depicting what is their own potential rather than their true accomplishments.
Secondly, people are easily duped by the flamboyant presentation of anything in modern days. Marketing strategies of any product is taking the advantage of this weakness of people's provincial vision. Despite, delineating the efficacy of any product in a particular circumstance, the launching company, instead, spends in an unfettered way to enhance the façade of that product. Thus, media has become a juggernaut in this epoch of incessant rivalry. we tend to believe the information that is presented in a lurid way by the media without any scrutinization or rationalization. Therefore, we are in a benighted state depriving ourselves from the actual news.
To conclude, truth always remains overshadowed by the sensational mixing of trifling matters and this has become the reality now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ing rather than what is inside of that. this stinging but veritable phenomenon is be...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much might', 'a good deal of might'.
Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
...n is becoming obvious day by day. While many might refute the claim that the verisimilitud...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...first but there remains much skepticism whether or not those words will be kept or retracted. ...
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Line 9, column 319, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unfettered way" with adverb for "unfettered"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... the launching company, instead, spends in an unfettered way to enhance the façade of that product. ...
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Line 9, column 451, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...aut in this epoch of incessant rivalry. we tend to believe the information that is...
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Line 9, column 504, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a lurid way" with adverb for "lurid"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lieve the information that is presented in a lurid way by the media without any scrutinization...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49681528662 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16597673042 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652866242038 0.4932671777 132% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7398732287 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0924133577075 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245918346871 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252920270479 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559761505303 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232070568285 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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