Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speakers asserts that the education in the formal form usually inhibit our mind and spirit rather than set them free. I agree with the statement and think that the formal education in general restricts the freedom of the students in some way or the other.
Firstly, the formal education consists of set of instructions, rules, conditions which have to be followed in order to receive degree or certification of the education. In this procedure, some of the rules may be too restrictive which may question the freedom necessary for the student. For example, if a student who is interested in western art is forced to project on eastern my feel that, he has not used his full potential. The set of instructions, rules, conditions which are innate of the formal education system may make it rigid organization with little or no freedom to the students.
Secondly, one may argue that formal education is for a limited time like for four years of college but the practices during those college shapes the creativity of the student in the future years. For instance, if a architectural student is always forced to design accordingly the supervisor then in professional environment, she/he may always seek a mentor, one who will guide through the design process. If the student during the college was left on his own with little supervision then that student would have little difficulty in the professional field and would have designed the project freely. Usually the formal education system is based on the principles of restricting the actual creativity from the student and meet only the criteria to pass certain courses.
To sum up, one may argue that the formal education is for limited time and there is enough time after the college to enjoy and relish the freedom but i think the restriction on the minds during the formal education process is long lasting and think that it inhibit the creativity of the student and make them trained individual to perform under instructions with out no personal input from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'assert'.
Suggestion: assert
The speakers asserts that the education in the formal form u...
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Suggestion:
... and spirit rather than set them free. I agree with the statement and think that ...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
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Suggestion: some
...on of the education. In this procedure, some of the rules may be too restrictive which may ...
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Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this college' or 'those colleges'?
Suggestion: this college; those colleges
...ars of college but the practices during those college shapes the creativity of the student in...
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Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t in the future years. For instance, if a architectural student is always forced ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ege to enjoy and relish the freedom but i think the restriction on the minds duri...
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Line 15, column 359, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...ndividual to perform under instructions with out no personal input from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, i think, in general, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97947214076 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71073724688 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0608260118 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.363636364 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6363636364 5.21951772744 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0718408557935 0.243740707755 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363149876152 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340620617287 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0503946244286 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303474782514 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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