Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Contemporary world's essence denotes an increasingly pace of life, the race to immediate reward being a consequence of it. While it is true that realistic goals are often the surest path for people to peacefully fulfil their needs and to enjoy a serene life, the statement made by the author is very awkward as non-always incompatible ideas are here juxtaposed nay opposed. Indeed, an idealistic goal isn't necessarily paired with immediate fame, and short-term aims don't preclude people from carving out strong personality or flourishing lives in the long run. Thus, for the debate can be substantiated, further discussion need to be undertaken.
Nowadays, seeking immediate recognition is emphasised due to the proximity of celebrities or entrepreneurs with the laity. New generations are growing with the idea that fame is within easy reach along the advent of social networks; moreover the appearance of a middle class make many people close in on achievements that were before quixotic for certain social strata. In this regard, the youth must be encouraged but also accompanied by their families and professionals in order to flourish in any aspect of life. The satisfaction after long-term efforts has a delicious taste as endorsed by the adage "The harder the fight, the better the victory".
Fame and recognition shouldn't be a goal for youth people, but at best a consequence of arduous work. Be it in sports, corporate area or academic fields, children have to be conveyed the principle that only by being consistent with a defined cynosure, will one culminate in achieving wonders. Consider a person setting long-term goals for themselves, such as wanting to become a doctor. On one's way to attaining such a goal, many insidious hurdles and temptation might come on the road, and young people often lack foresight to repudiate these hindrances. Therefore, more experienced people are required for them to stay on track.
Additionally, one can't fail to consider that immediate fame is often at variance with long-term efforts and struggles, despite being actual success' trademarks. Some research conducted within the American youth reported that scholastic underachievement in the United States is due to children seeking momentary results, which is often the catalyst for dropping out of school. The failure of educational institutions and certain families to urge on children that patience paired with work are the main constituents of success, shores up the view put forth. The race to fast money-making, for instance, and thus immediate recognition, is another harmful phenomenon of our society. People are inclined to put aside probity for the only purpose of mirroring sumptuous living, resulting in increasing rate of criminality and a soulless society.
There is, however, a subtle underlying meaning in the statement made by the author, that is in my opinion, elitist and outmoded. Admittedly, professional and personal less traveled paths would not befit the majority, but it is the idiosyncrasies peculiar to each individual that should direct people's future, not formal convenience. The latter all too often circumscribes children's dreams and preclude these same dreams from growing to be realistic goals. Parents' and professionals' myopic views in terms of the youth's potential or will, is as deleterious as is immediate fame sough-after by them. Some mavericks' proclivity of being errant has also lead our species to be the most advanced, and has permitted enhancing the overall well-being. Also, the so-called long-term aims often referring to studies, aren't suited for everyone. Our society evolves, and so must do the mentality, and the idea that youth, whom want to rapidly undertake projects or follow uncharted paths, seek to be extravagantly illustrious is ageist and erroneous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
Contemporary worlds essence denotes an increasingly pace of...
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Message: You used an adverb ('increasingly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('pace') instead of another adjective.
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Suggestion: isn't
...nay opposed. Indeed, an idealistic goal isnt necessarily paired with immediate fame,...
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Suggestion: don't
...ith immediate fame, and short-term aims dont preclude people from carving out strong...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
... victory'. Fame and recognition shouldnt be a goal for youth people, but at best...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...to stay on track. Additionally, one cant fail to consider that immediate fame is...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mavericks'' or 'maverick's'?
Suggestion: mavericks'; maverick's
...mmediate fame sough-after by them. Some mavericks proclivity of being errant has also lea...
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Suggestion: leaded; led
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3228.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 601.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37104825291 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02284805457 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 349.0 215.323595506 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580698835275 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 1008.9 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6177445917 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.12 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.04 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313207458671 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761481903355 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046167247911 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17135446955 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375332960192 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 191.0 100.480337079 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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