Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
I disagree with that Author claim that young people should be encourage to pursuing the long term goals rather than immediate fame and recognition. Which I will explain in details with help of the illustrations. Firstly, There are great gifted young artist and young prodigies are there. We shall encourage them to pursue there talent. While pursuing there talent they might get famous and recognise, but instead of telling them to make career plan and focus on long term goals , they should grab the opportunity and make most out of it. Now a days there are many singers who gets early recognition through social media and get famous. While doing that they might get approach by many musical talent seekers. If they gave up that opportunity and wait till according to the long term plan then they might never get such opportunity to pursue there dream and there talent might never get the recognition they deserve Therefore, it is always wise to grab the opportuinity when it present itself. Further I will add that while pursuing the talent in the public eye
It will get more enhance. The young people will learn about the dos and don’t in their respective industries early on. They will get correct guidance to pursue enhance their knowledge. It is in the news about the young science prodigy. Who now get to work with his ideals and prominent figures in the field. That young boys is learning so much from world class talent rather than still from his local schools who has limited number of resourses and his talent is getting the recognition it deserves This is happen due to his unique science experience got famous. I will further add that due to early exposers in their field they get to more option to try out and select the one. They get more time to explore the desire field. Some young mart prodigies are happy with not going through there mundane life and get to do some exciting early on rather than in the distant future. Also, Some prodigies prefer to work in the young age and then taking the early retirement and work towards betterment of humanity. Authors claim about the young people making long term, realistic goals is correct in terms of many talent might not get recognise. And young people might lose there childhood while waiting for such opportunities. Also while chasing these opportunities there are chances that young people will get attracted to wrong part of field as sometimes we see child actor is doing substance abuse. Therefore, young people shall follow there dreams and opportunities but at the same time be cautious of its surroundings and it nit get affected there moral values.
To sum up it up I will say that young people if their talent get recognise and opportunities present itself then should not shy away from fame and recognition
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Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
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...career plan and focus on long term goals , they should grab the opportunity and ma...
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Suggestion: Nowadays
...he opportunity and make most out of it. Now a days there are many singers who gets early r...
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...pportunity and make most out of it. Now a days there are many singers who gets early r...
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...on through social media and get famous. While doing that they might get approach by m...
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...le pursuing the talent in the public eye It will get more enhance. The young peop...
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...eople will learn about the dos and don’t in their respective industries early on...
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... learn about the dos and don’t in their respective industries early on. They wil...
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...ing the recognition it deserves This is happen due to his unique science experience go...
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...nd work towards betterment of humanity. Authors claim about the young people mak...
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...d not shy away from fame and recognition
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, therefore, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2327.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82780082988 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38074533261 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46265560166 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8801181834 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.173913043 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9565217391 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290781726539 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934291047873 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127582922663 0.0758088955206 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211049521401 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585544337677 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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