Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
We are all familiar with disciplinary phrases from our older generations that we should not waste time in useless, penniless activities but rather have to commit ourselves to self-improvement in order to realize goals that will bring long-term benefit. This approach stands upon the binary between idealism and practicalism, as the former tends to be passionate but harmful, while the latter seems to be realistic but banal. Considering both the cons and pros of these characteristics in terms of life management, this essay will provide insightful evidence in support of acquiring a balancing perspective.
Firstly, setting goals that are long-term and realistic consists of the basis of pursuing a healthy life management. We can not help but take serious consideration into fully being responsible to ourselves when planning for our future. That is, lucrativeness and sustainability may be a crucial factor in choosing one’s career. Thus, self-assessment is required in order to acknowledge one’s limit and potential in terms of achieving the goals that are being set. Encouraging individuals who are willing to take part in a society by putting efforts for practical issues such as economic stability and cultural well-being shall be a merit to the society itself, as individuals will be strongly affiliated in the particular community.
However, looking at the idiosyncrasy of the “young” generation, it shall also be a puerile attitude to limit one’s perspectives only to practical issues. Society stands on the consistent phase of flux in which the youth had always been an influential remonstrator in revising the pre given rules. The boon bestowed to the young generation is that they are not yet strongly connected to the fixity of society, which is what they have to facilitate the most. Although for the elderly it may seem too risky to commit oneself to unrealistic goals, young people should have the choice for the alternatives as their life is still open-ended.
Furthermore, immediate fame and recognition can be not as misleading as it seems, as it is a factor that propels a strong passion and active behavior. Social influence is a desirable tenet that one shall pursue, as it is the sense of being connected to a broader world. Especially when considering the hyper network and various forms of communication nowadays, grasping the opportunities to gain reputation by utilizing one’s skill in self-presenting is not so unrealistic as it originally seemed like. For example, a well-known artist group called Daft Punk started their career quite early in their lifetime, exposed to numerous attractions of club culture at the time. Instead of turning their attention to the already established realm, they risked themselves by showing their pioneering styles of music which pulled them up to the current reputation. As media allows opportunities to maximize one’s communicative skills and show one’s uniqueness in personality and ability, young people are encouraged to focus on the idealistic pursue as well.
To conclude, it is crucial not to be stuck only in a single perspective in terms of planning, managing, and also enjoying one’s life. Both attitudes should be attained in order to have a balancing approach, so that the youth may be alive and healthful to the whole society as well. (532 words)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 198, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... influence is a desirable tenet that one shall pursue, as it is the sense of bein...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2812.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 534.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.265917603 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09686648037 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548689138577 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6764550719 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.6 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262589712706 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668226459602 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579651953107 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131616295694 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03693798771 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 100.480337079 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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