As we acquire more knowledge things do not become more comprehensible but more complex and mysterious

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As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

The statement assumes that the complexity of current life with various social interaction is attributable to a formidable amount of accumulating knowledge. Although it seems plausible to consider whether I agree or disagree with the statement at first glance, it indeed arouses several sets of doubts before positing my argument. That is, we need to be wary of the presumption that we are indeed acquiring more knowledge compared to the past.
To begin, especially for those who might prefer to agree with the statement would be likely to argue the various means of acquiring new information, including online sources such as YouTube, Wikipedia, and numerous informational posts that are uploaded by our neighbors on social media. However, information and knowledge has substantial differences in terms of acknowledging it as a social fact. A social fact is something that has gained enough authority and validity in order to be deemed as credible and thoroughly verified. In other words, we don’t ascertain a piece of informing data depicting an image of a flying UFO in the middle of the sky a fact that UFOs and life in outer space exist in real life. Similarly, a piece of information posted by uncle Tom on Facebook - although it seemingly is analogous to - is different from news articles posted on New York Times, or on other authoritative journals. That is, the mere fact that there are growing numbers of informational sites cannot be equal to the fact that we are acquiring more knowledge. Information has to be socially discussed and confirmed in order to act as a knowledge or social fact. Yet it is not surprising that many are confused with discriminating information and knowledge, as there are numerous scandals on issues that have contradictory evidence from unknown sources.
For example, a well-known, tragic incident that happened in Gwang-ju, South Korea on May 18 of 1980 has gained constant attention to the public until now, as there are several gossiping attempts to nullify its historical importance and instead activate arbitrary partisanship. Although, the massacre in Gwang-ju has gained enough factual evidence through thorough investigation and testimony to understand it as a historical event, there are handful people arguing that it had never have happened or it was a plan launched by the North Korean members, by posting conspiracy videos on YouTube. That is the case which makes people confused and regard the current time as complex, but this is not due to an accumulation of knowledge but instead to the state of our current time that cannot discern arguments and knowledges.
Thus, we should pose a question on whether we are in fact acquiring more knowledge in general. The current era is identified as the post-Cold War era, or in a more cultural aspect, the post-modern are, which is characterized as a significant period in which history is reevaluated and the already acknowledged facts are constantly being asked with skepticism. Thus, it might seem natural that most of the common people nowadays are feeling a sense of confusion and complexity. Instead of reaching to a rash conclusion and comprehend the past events with homogeneous perspective, various thoughts and opinions that had originally been oppressed due to the restraint political atmosphere are gaining voice. As it is so, we may be wary of being impetuous, and instead take time to reconsider the given facts.
In conclusion, although I agree with the diagnosis that we are living in a complex, mysterious, and incomprehensible world, the main culprit of the atmosphere is not due to the fact that we acquire more knowledge, but that we are reevaluating and rethinking the given history that has been a series of ongoing war and violence.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...andful people arguing that it had never have happened or it was a plan launched by t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, thus, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in general, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.5258426966 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3141.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 614.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11563517915 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01899826829 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 215.323595506 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49348534202 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1001.7 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0928302874 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.05 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184557341966 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656970097161 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984643255116 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126972479156 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667935473754 0.0667264976115 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 173.0 100.480337079 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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