Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As the young generation today yearn for fame and recognition, it must be kept in mind that these cannot be achieved just by dreaming but a lot of effort is needed to be put before achieving them. Hence it won’t be incorrect to say that instant fame is an illusion and it is only through setting up of long term goals and planning accordingly which leads to them. Fame is a result of success. Setting up of pragmatic goals and following well organized plan can lead one to success and hence to fame.
Setting up of long term goals will help to keep one focused in his work and hence one will be able to put significant effort to work on those goals. Along with goal setting, a well organized plan further a necessity to achieve the goal. A goal set up to learn computer programming within a few months for instance, need to be supported with proper planning. These may include first listing out different programming languages to be learnt and then setting a time period for each of them. A meticulous follow up of the plan along with dedication to learn more and more will help one to achieve one ‘s objective.
Long term goals may be related to something of social importance like goal to clean the surroundings of the community or may even be personal goals related to career or self development. When one realises one’s goal in life and works all to achieve it, he will reach the zenith of his work. People like Steve Jobs, Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerburg, all of them had a clear goal in their mind. They had plans for it which they executed properly and they are not only successful but have recognition not only in the silicon valley but in every household and in the electronics market.
Hence, before yearning for fame and recognition, one should ravenously work and put effort to achieve one’s goal. With meticulous planning of work, one will achieve success and this success in the long run will make them famous. So instead of seeking instant fame, young people should be encouraged to set up long term realistic goals and further they should be encouraged to organize their plans to achieve their goals. Everything else will follow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...needed to be put before achieving them. Hence it won't be incorrect to say that ...
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Line 7, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eir goals. Everything else will follow.
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211267605634 0.240241500013 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.19014084507 0.157235817809 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0704225352113 0.0880659088768 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0492957746479 0.0497285424764 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0469483568075 0.0444667217837 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107981220657 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0610328638498 0.0406280797675 150% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52681678168 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0516431924883 0.030933414821 167% => OK
Particles: 0.00704225352113 0.0016655270985 423% => OK
Determiners: 0.0633802816901 0.0997080785238 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.037558685446 0.0249443105267 151% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00704225352113 0.0148568991511 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2178.0 2732.02544248 80% => OK
No of words: 382.0 452.878318584 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70157068063 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.293193717277 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222513089005 0.280924506359 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.143979057592 0.200843997647 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107329842932 0.132149295362 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52681678168 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 219.290929204 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484293193717 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 51.667252537 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4705882353 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.282330008 59.4972553346 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.117647059 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4705882353 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 44.7218971358 51.4728631049 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.32786885246 1.64882698954 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362557188795 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130273296673 0.123202303941 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0774084500425 0.077325440228 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.520543944295 0.547984918172 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130736912731 0.149214159877 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141204245927 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715173898794 0.0892212321368 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.373773305832 0.385218514788 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0167877846012 0.0692045440612 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272251834574 0.275328986314 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282316047224 0.0653680567796 43% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.