Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

Every person in society tries to gain some sort of respect or fame whether they are lauded for small or colossal achievements. Every person needs recognition to check if they are heading in the correct direction. If a person gets approbation for any work, then the person will be encouraged to do more great works in life. Thus, recognition, being small or big, is crucial for one's growth.

However, there are many difficulties when we think about achieving long-term goals. If a 12-year-old student thinks to get a 40 lakh per annum job in a well-established company, he might achieve it. However, the complications & unprecedented changes that the student needs to face would be immense. It's possible that the student's family is suffering from penury and do not have enough money to provide proper education to the student which might act as a catalyst for hindrance. Moreover, if the student is completely focused on his long-term goal and eschewing the little happiness that he received from small achievements, then it might be possible that at some point in his life he might get hunted by depression. If he is not getting enough praise to make him encouraged, then he will think less of himself and slowly he will lose self-confidence, and therefore it is necessary to keep getting applauded frequently.

People who are focused on short-term goals rather than long-term praise are susceptible to accepting the loss. Because these people have got enough praise in their life doing small things, they are used to accepting defeat. If they are defeated, they stand up and move on quickly. While, those who are keeping eye on long-term goals, and not caring about small achievements, will get most negatively impacted when they concede their defeat in their lives. Because these people haven't been applauded for a long time, they will be expecting a much higher appreciation and recognition, and if they failed to achieve it, they will be anything but happy.

While it's plausible to have a long-term goal in life, short-term achievements should not be obviated. It's better to have a series of short-term goals which unite into one long-term goal. This will help a person to stay optimistic and productive. Even if the person fails to achieve some goals, the person will be depressed for a shorter time. Once the person bypasses that period, he will stand up and start to focus on the next goal and ultimately stay sharp on his long-term success.

From the aforementioned points discuss, one should give importance to both short-term fame and recognition and to keep on track to achieve the long-term goals. It's not wise to neglect any of the two categories as both are equally important in one life. It helps the person not to lose focus in life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90343347639 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7620370694 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489270386266 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3338641162 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2083333333 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227515969012 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696003622178 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787785591163 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129659064808 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503106239475 0.0667264976115 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments