Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Achieving success is paramount for young people whether it comes through the appetite for immediate fame and recognition or through the motivation for long-term realistic goals. Given that both the two mentioned factors are important in their own right for a young individual’s success, the proposition that they must be only encouraged for pursuing long-term objectives is a bit extreme.
The statement ignores the fact that the longing for immediate fame and recognition is itself a driving force for long-term success. It is a human psychology to desire for popularity in the community or a group and to be the center of everyone’s attention. This desire acts as a prompt to work harder and distinguish one’s self from others to get the accolades which is beneficial in the longer run as well. For example, the desire to gain fame by winning a national essay competition is appealing to a student, though it’s a short term objective. Regardless of the result of the competition, in the attempt to succeed, the student ends up improving his or her writing skills which may prove to be useful for his or her career in later life.
Another inadequacy of the recommendation is that it fails to understand that a feat may seem unrealistic for some and for some it may seem within reach depending upon their respective positions in their life journey. The idea for a realistic long term goal itself develops from a series of short term achievements that beget immediate recognition. For instance, a novice in politics can only see the goal of serving the country as president when he or she climbs up the political rung from a Councillor to a senator. Similarly, the hunger for immediate recognition spurs individuals from one success to another finally culminating in a successful academic life or career. For example, consider a student who craves for recognition one gets after topping in the exams. This hunger motivates him or her every year to work harder and achieve highest grades. Though, he or she was driven through the appetite for instant fame, the ultimate result is the student’s excellent education and academic record which might not have been possible by the encouragement for the same end result. This is corroborated by a recent study by Chicago Booth experts that concluded that maximizing immediate rewards for those in the pursuit of lifelong goals increases their perseverance for the goal.
Notwithstanding the importance of immediate rewards, the aim for long-term achievements is crucial in young people’s life journey. Youngsters stimulated with a lifelong aim in sight, take positive steps with discipline, sincerity and punctuality instead of ambling in quest of ephemeral fame. They learn to face short-term failures with courage and patience rather than submitting. In the absence of a lifelong mission, they might get overwhelmed by instant fame and find themselves unable to channellize that recognition positively to work harder to get better in their profession. Therefore, without a long-term objective in sight, failure to achieve immediate goals can inculcate desperation or success can result in complacency. Moreover, the craving for instant fame without a proper life mission may prompt youth to take unethical and unfair means.
To conclude with, in the attempt to emphasize the importance of long-term goals for youngsters, the recommendation undermines the role that motivation for short-term fame or recognition plays to achieve the same. While long-term objectives provide guiding principles for a youth’s journey, the desire for instant recognition or fame provides the necessary push.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 832, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'achieve the highest'.
Suggestion: achieve the highest
...im or her every year to work harder and achieve highest grades. Though, he or she was driven th...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h to take unethical and unfair means. To conclude with, in the attempt to emph...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3103.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 583.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32246998285 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07367124208 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495711835334 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 969.3 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8932401363 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.913043478 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.347826087 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237997909584 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818532884339 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752697311809 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15971166935 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489528127625 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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