Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Whether youngsters should pursue long-term goals could be weighed in many aspects. However, the argument is based on generalization. The statement simply assumes that all teenagers can have settled theirs goals in this age, but in reality, most of students, especially in Asian, do not know what they actually interest in. Moreover, it is presumptuous to suggests that pursuing long-term goals is conducive to them. Factors others than realistic goals are also responsible for teenagers to succeed. Therefore, even though having long-term plans may be advantageous, there is no guarantee that every young man will benefit from it.
Admittedly, the speaker’s claim might appear to have considerate merit. After all, a realistic goal can make oneself having more motivation, and therefore more likely to perseverance and succeed. Yet the speaker fails to provide a clear litmus test for measuring how many students actually know what will they do, or interest in the future, or do the goals set by them is what they truly love, or it is just the goals of their parents. When we speak of “long-term goals” for teenagers, the following come to mind: entering a good university, being a doctor or scientist, and finally having a high payment job. Curiously, most of those long-term aims are set by their parents, this may not be what children set for their future. Thus, in order to determine the prerequisites of of long-term target, it is necessary to examine the different sorts of students.
Secondly, although some may say that young people with realistic aim, may have more chance to perseverance. The real picture of it, however, is that long-term plans means that you will not having any benefits within sort amount of time. That will make teenagers want to give up. When they see their peers who seeks immediate aims already standing on the podium, and they still do not having any prize. They will start to question themselves whether their goals is right, whether they are idiot, or even whether should they give up. As a result, having a long term could have high possibility to frustrate young people.
Lastly, some may still argue that, people who having immediate fame or recognition may not able to do so in the future. The supporters of this argument must be reminded that, the experience and the fame or even the person they notice which having short-term goals have is unexchangeable. Those fame or some powerful person will make them much easier to succeed after. If a panter met some buyers due to their fame, those buyers are more likely to buy the painters picture after years, and therefore, they are more likely to succeed in the future.
In summary, this claim is not persuasive as it stands. Although having realistic aim may sometimes benefit youngsters, there still lots of disadvantage within it. If teenagers can properly utilize their fame, they have higher chance to win those who having long-term goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether youngsters should pursue long-term goal...
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Line 1, column 241, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...eirs goals in this age, but in reality, most of students, especially in Asian, do not know what ...
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Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...in order to determine the prerequisites of of long-term target, it is necessary to ex...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'plans'' or 'plan's'?
Suggestion: plans'; plan's
...cture of it, however, is that long-term plans means that you will not having any bene...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...long-term plans means that you will not having any benefits within sort amount of time...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fame' or 'Those fames'?
Suggestion: This fame; Those fames
...hort-term goals have is unexchangeable. Those fame or some powerful person will make them ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, after all, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01221995927 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64294269163 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494908350305 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8684030679 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.44 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.64 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272409310984 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818634333319 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663322307075 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165542200597 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620403876394 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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