The government should offer internet access to all of citizens at no cost
When it comes to offering internet to all citizens, whether is it worth it or not? Although some believes it should definitely be done, it is putting money on different things that contribute the greatest benefits for those citizens.
It is so argued that government should build wi-fi or internet cable to all citizens at no cost, because without internet, people live in rural area may not know news around the world, besides people can learn some new knowledge through internet. The supporters of this argument must be reminded that, in practicality, there’re lots of people still don’t have electronic devices or don’t know how to use it. As a result, internet will be useless for them. Furthermore, they can still watch news through TV channel, and learn new knowledge or science through Discovery. By contrast, government can put money into buying computer and hiring some teachers to teach them how to use it. 9
Supporters of offering internet access to all civilians may still argue that without internet, kids in rural area cannot enter best college, because they don’t have enough resources. With internet, they can learn from best teacher around the world. The real picture of his idea, however, is that most of the children will use internet to play online video game. Hence, internet will not improve their learning but even decrease their grade. Moreover, most of the online courses are teach in English, and in Taiwan, students in those places don’t have great foreign language ability. By comparison, allocating more money to improve the infrastructure and assigning the best professor who specialize in education to teach local teacher how to improve their teaching materials and skill will be a more effective way. 14
Offering internet to all people is not necessarily a cog to make the country of machine run. Allocating money on providing free computer or hiring the best teacher may be a better way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'enter the best'.
Suggestion: enter the best
...out internet, kids in rural area cannot enter best college, because they don’t have enough...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'from the best'.
Suggestion: from the best
...esources. With internet, they can learn from best teacher around the world. The real pict...
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Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taught'.
Suggestion: taught
...oreover, most of the online courses are teach in English, and in Taiwan, students in ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and skill will be a more effective way. 14 Offering internet to all people is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.075 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58945427407 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7949137003 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.266666667 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263014334228 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080057915571 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0981954912931 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145661295979 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384792637206 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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