One of the greatest challenges in modern society is to have up-to-date skills for one’s work. To better achieve this, the government should give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to catch up their work skills. Do you think this is an effective way for government to spend its money?
If the aim is to help people find a job, whether is it necessarily to give all adults over the age of 25a training course? Although some believe that this policy will solve the problems of unemployment, there are still lots of methods which can tackle this issue.
It is so argued that people who cannot find a job is because they do not have up-to-date skills. Thus, taking a course to catch up their work skills will be helpful for them. Supporters of this argument must be reminded that, in practicality, those skills learned on class may still not meet the need of each company. Besides, the courses opened in rural area may not have suitable material to teach their students. For example, company such as mechanic require employers possess the knowledge of operating expensive machine. However, those training courses may not be able to afford high-cost equipment to educate students. By contrast, providing many internship programs by collaborating with local companies may serve as a better solution. Those companies have greatest facilities to train workers. Moreover, students who perform well can be directly employed by the companies--which solve the issues of finding suitable talents.
Supporters of giving every adult over the age of 25 to take training courses may still argue that despite the skills they learn from class may not fit the need of company, people can still learn new knowledge from it. The real picture of this statement, however, is that there lots of people who already have a decent job. Forcing them to take the class is not realistic. Students are likely to surf their smartphone or sleep during the class owing to being tired after work. Furthermore, requiring all adults to have a course must cost lots of money. Government should put money on something much useful. By comparison, government can just give part of people who cannot find the job a course and allocate the rest of the money on enhancing education. Making students who graduate from school have the ability that company truly need.
Giving all people over 25 a training course is not necessarily a cog to make the country of machine run. There are still lots of way such as enhancing education or offering internship can solve this problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 760, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the greatest'.
Suggestion: have the greatest
...e as a better solution. Those companies have greatest facilities to train workers. Moreover, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94986807388 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58987609298 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532981530343 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8176237007 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269018417316 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780420842681 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599595830899 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167728450452 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215295239566 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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