Nowadays, people spend more time in their work or study. If the
purpose is to learn something within a small amount of time, which
do you prefer:
l. learn a sport that you have never learned before
2. learn how to cook
3. learn to make something by hand [making clothes or jewelry]
If the aim is to learn something within a small amount of time, what should people learn? Although some believe learning a sport or how to cook stand as priority choice, it is learning how to make something by hand contribute the greatest benefits for people.
It is certainly an advantage if people learn a sport that they have never learned before, because they can cultivate their interest in a new area. Besides, there are lots of sports require many to played such as basketball or tennis. As a result, people can make friend during sport, and meet someone who have similar interests in sports. However, it must be noticed that learning a whole new sport require plenty of training. Nowadays, more and more people busy at work. They do not have much time left to learn a sport. Especially for sports require many people, it is difficult to find a time which everyone is suitable. The same could be said to learning how to cook. By sharing the food they could in party, people can makes lots of friends. Nevertheless, cooking a good meal also need lots of practice. People live in city may not have enough time to do it. Moreover, in Taiwan people usually eat outside instead of cooking themselves owing to busy at work. Thus, the opportunities of sharing food with others is very little.
Learning to make something by hand, however, paints a brighter picture. Unlike learning how to cook or new sport, making jewelry or some handicrafts takes a small amount of time. People just need to spend a hour to learn how to make a card after work. Just like learning new sports, people could make friends during selling their handicrafts at flea market. Different from having a party to share foods, flea market conducted every weekend. People do not have to find a time to gather everyone themselves. Outshining the other two choices, making some small goods train our brain. For elderly, doing some work by hands prevent them from getting Alzheimer's disease or degenerating.
So beneficial is learning something by hand that it must be taken into more serious consideration than the other alternatives. It is this tasks allow people to enjoy benefits seen in other pursuits and only seen in learning to make something by hand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ount of time. People just need to spend a hour to learn how to make a card after ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79792746114 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50081465424 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528497409326 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2608393803 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.08 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.44 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.56740228631 0.236089414692 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165110203676 0.076458572812 216% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124979846137 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.391612820141 0.150856017488 260% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0994014484725 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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