The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
You should write at least 150 words.
The chart shows the percentage of the activities by Australian children aged from 5-to-14 even though it is a significant difference between girls and boys.
According to the data, the percentage of the activity by Australia is quantity maximum (approximately 80%) for the girls. It starts from the art and craft rapidly to 58%. Besides that, the percentage of the electronic or computer games increases gradually to amount 60%. And then, the watching rises grammatically up to about 100%. Moreover, the girls of activity decrease lately to 25% up to the second decade of the bike riding and boarding or roller lading.
On the other hand, the activity of the boys by Australia are minimum around 40% for the art and craft. It grows significantly to the best per cent up to the second decade of action, and then falls considerably up to about 38%. In the sameness, the girls and the boys have the best activity of watching TV or video to reach 100%.
Ultimately, there are many children, who are 5 until 14 years old, fill their leisure with activities.
Sentence: The chart shows the percentage of the activities by Australian children aged from 5-to-14 even though they are a significant difference between girls and boys.
Description: The fragment a significant difference is not usually preceded by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: According to the data, the percentage of the activity by Australia is quantities maximum approximately 80 for the girls.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and quantities
Sentence: On the other hand, the activity of the boys by Australia is minimum around 40 for the art and craft.
Description: The fragment boys by Australia is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Sentence: It grows up significantly to the best per cent up to the second decade of action, and then falls considerably up to about 38.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to to and about
Sentence: Moreover, the girls of activity decrease lately to 25 up to the second decade of the bike riding and boarding or rollerblading.
Error: rollerblading Suggestion: roller lading
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
Sentence Length SD: 4.976 7.5
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 10 10
No. of Words: 182 200
No. of Characters: 845 1000
No. of Different Words: 103 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.673 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.643 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 52 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.976 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4