5 The graph shows the development of a particular college capus from 1975 to 2002 and the proposed development of 2020

Essay topics:

5.The graph shows the development of a particular college capus from 1975 to 2002 and the proposed development of 2020.

The two maps compare changes which took place in one of the university dormitories in 1975,2002,and 2020.
In overall, it is clear that the campus has become a more convenient place with many new constructions to serve a better facility for students.
One of the most noticeable transformations is the construction of an IT room next to a library center on the far left corner of the campus. Moreover, an outside gym center is planned to be transferred into an indoor one in 2020. Also, while the road running across the dormitory and many pines are proposed to be demolished in order to make new way to enter science facility, another new street will be built to connect the indoor sport center to the IT room.
There used to be a drama room and a music room in the northern-east corner near the car park, however, they will be turned into a science building and a geology room in 2020. Remarkably, a car park is decided to be enlarged

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Average: 4.4 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y dormitories in 1975,2002,and 2020. In overall, it is clear that the campus has...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
... transformations is the construction of an IT room next to a library center on the fa...
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Message: Did you mean 'rooms'?
Suggestion: rooms
...formations is the construction of an IT room next to a library center on the far lef...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...t to connect the indoor sport center to the IT room. There used to be a drama room an...
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Message: Did you mean 'rooms'?
Suggestion: rooms
...nnect the indoor sport center to the IT room. There used to be a drama room and a m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 771.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56213017751 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78641057467 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585798816568 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1358248662 43.030603864 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.142857143 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0600071266759 0.215688989381 28% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295121072538 0.103423049105 29% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398834336017 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0432872708885 0.15604864568 28% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464257514327 0.0819641961636 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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