Many people believe that family has a greater influence on a child’s life and development compared to other factors, such as friends, tv, music and so on. Do you agree or disagree
It is recently believed that there are several factors which directly influence the growth of youngsters. In addition, while many people consider that other factors such as friends , music or television have the significant effect on children’s growth, the others believe such an influence from parents is greater compared to external factors. Personally, I strongly approve with this point of view.
On the other hand, I understand why many people of the fervent conviction believe that factors external to family also have a significant impact on the development of children . To begin with, friends have always been believed to be a great influence on children’s growth. In addition, due to the massive amount of time kids spend at school, they can easily imitate the behaviors of peers who they admire or respect.Moreover, music and television also play a significant role in the upbringing of kids. Nowadays, thanks to the developing of the technological society, children spend more time on watching television or listening to music via internet than they did in the past. For instance, after being exposed to fashion shows on tv , many kids try to imitate the style and outlook of many global models.
However, despite these impacts described above, I believe such an influence from parents can directly affects the personality of young generation on a large scale. Firstly, many moral values or disciplines can only be taught thoroughly by family’s members. It is mother or father that children spend most of their time with. Hence, parents may create more opportunities for their children to learn about basic values which the external factors cannot effectively provide. Moreover, a child may learn about family traditions or religious rituals by observing their parents. For instance, adolescents in this contemporary society tend to follow their parents’ footstep and habitual activities. Hence, if parents know how to control their behaviors in the appropriate manner, they can easily create a significant impact to turn their children in to well-behaved aldults .
Take everything into consideration, although I cannot deny that kids can receive a great influence from other factors, I believe family plays a more significant role in shaping the behaviors of children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36666666667 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9315851553 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538888888889 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6370542978 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248084174495 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814135108346 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899881975262 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168626909053 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947655983514 0.056905535591 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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