The bar chart below shows figures of annual coffee and meat consumption.
The given bar chart compares the amount of coffee and meat consumption in seven different nations as Norway, France, Germany, USA, Russia, China and Japan every year.
Overall, it can be seen that Western countries consume more meat and coffee than the Asian nations. The units are expressed in kg per person.
As regards meat consumption in western nations, the US tops the list with 122 kg per person, which is twice as much as the Norway at 60 kg per person. Ranked in second place is Germany at 87 kg, considerably higher than the France at 72 kg. In contrast, the amount of consumption for Asian nations is maintained below 50 kg per person with a slight distinction. China, Russia and Japan stand at 47kg, 45kg and 42 kg per person respectively.
With respect to coffee consumption, Norway drinks most coffee with 9 kg per person, whereas Japan and China have least coffee at 3 kg and 2 kg per person, making it the lowest quantity of all countries. On the other hand, the difference is insignificant for remaining nations like France (5 kg) vs Germany (7kg) and Russia (5 kg) vs the US (4kg) correspondingly.
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Western countries consume more meat and coffee than the Asian nations
Western countries consume more meat and coffee than the Asian nations do.
flaws:
better not to use same styles, like 'As regards..', 'With respect to'. Look at another essay without those transition words:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 197 200
No. of Characters: 883 1000
No. of Different Words: 106 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.746 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.482 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 34 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.962 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.505 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.736 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.231 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the least'.
Suggestion: have the least
... kg per person, whereas Japan and China have least coffee at 3 kg and 2 kg per person, mak...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, whereas, as regards, in contrast, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69035532995 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72132353707 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578680203046 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2341161492 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.23603664747 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115120228212 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526070922467 0.103423049105 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612479901034 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094957828739 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536962500741 0.0819641961636 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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