The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given column graph elucidates proportion of Australian male and female of six age groups pursuing physical activity in 2010.
Overall, at first glance at the chart, it is noticeable that female of almost all age groups is dramatically higher than men.

In younger age group males were a bit more than females, the opposite trend is shown in 65 and over in which females are slightly higher, roughly 47%. Men doing physical activity percentage drops suddenly after 24.

Irrespective of age after 44 from the whilst tendency it is confirmed that men in an average have increased, meanwhile females remain steadily at around 53%.

On the other hand in age group 25 to 34 mild variation is shown by 1% in female and downward trend is depicted by male age cohort.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... trend is depicted by male age cohort.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 643.0 965.302439024 67% => OK
No of words: 132.0 196.424390244 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87121212121 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38956122427 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55062380962 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674242424242 0.547539520022 123% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3466088166 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.166666667 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180404841956 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998376886416 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050802589057 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104437301773 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449411613418 0.0819641961636 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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