The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of males and females who did exercise regularly in Australia in 2010.

At first, we can see, the teenagers and adult men had more physical activities than teenagers and adult women. The proportion of men is 52.8% while the proportion of women is 47.7%.

In following, women between 25 to 34 did exercise more than the men at the same age. Their proportions were48.9% and 42.2% respectively. The most difference in percentage was for the group with ages between 35 and 44. At this age group, the percentage of the men who had sport activities was under four-fifth of the percentage of the women. The proportions in the group with ages between 45 and 54 and the age group with ages from 55 to 64 were almost the same. The percentages were 43.1% and 45.1% for men and 53.3% and 53% for women respectively.

Finally, for men and women with ages 65 and over, the percentages were almost the same. It was 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women.

To sum up, according to the chart, the women between 25 and 64 did more exersice than the men in 2010. The only group of men who had more physical activities than women, were from 15 to 24 years old. Also, Australian men and women who were 65 years old and older, had the same percentage of physical activities.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, while, as for, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 6.8 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1068.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5641025641 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55240923431 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418803418803 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 310.5 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6354109984 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.2857142857 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300902601473 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123999107489 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06393836163 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184825240348 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062337179772 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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