The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian male and female in 15 years old to 65 years old and over who did regular exercises in 2010.
     It is clear that female have a higher rate of doing regular physical activity than the male with age above 25 years old. Age group 15 to 24 is the only group that men who did regular physical activity are bigger than women.
     In 15 to 54 age group of female, the percentage rose slightly to a peak of 53.3 percent, then as the age grows, the rate reached the bottom, with 47.1 percentage. By contrast, the male has an opposite trend to female. In the age group 15 to 44, their percentage saw the biggest decline, then rose slightly to 46.7 percent.
     In the age group 35 to 44, there is the biggest percentage difference between men and women, with 39.5 and 52.5 respectively. In the elder age group (65 and over), the difference is negligible, with 46.7 for men and 47.1 for women.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 785.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56395348837 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57091813656 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.065985166 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.125 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.23603664747 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42457086089 0.215688989381 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179149720129 0.103423049105 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117809671575 0.0843802449381 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239425264329 0.15604864568 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829367201174 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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