The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The chart below compares the proportion of Australian in different age groups who did regular exercise between men and women in the year 2010.

It is clear that women had more preference in doing exercise than men in general. Men who are in adolescence did physical activities most frequent while it was more common for mid-age women.

Looking at the chart in more detail, the figure of men is more stable than women, usually keep between 42% and 47% except the men aged 15 to 24(52.8%) and aged 35 to 44(39.5%). Meanwhile, the frequency of doing regular sports was similar for women who aged 35 to 64(nearly 53%). And in other 3 age group (age 15 to 24, 25 to 24, 65 and over), the proportion of women keeps close to 48%.

We could see there are big differences about the exercise habit in two gender among people aged 25 to 64, since much more females did regular exercise than males at that age period. Interestingly, there were more men than women did regular sports at the age 15 to 24. The figures of two gender are similar when comes to the age 65 and over.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 72, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'gender' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'genders'.
Suggestion: genders
...erences about the exercise habit in two gender among people aged 25 to 64, since much ...
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Line 13, column 288, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'gender' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'genders'.
Suggestion: genders
...at the age 15 to 24. The figures of two gender are similar when comes to the age 65 an...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48469387755 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29913606721 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515306122449 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4653749613 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400805208567 0.215688989381 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.190221602137 0.103423049105 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141065746347 0.0843802449381 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302332714894 0.15604864568 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143756577517 0.0819641961636 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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