The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph gives information about the percentage of males and females from Australia in six different age groups who did regular physical exercise in 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that females from Australia did more physical exercise in 2010 compared to males except for 15 to 24 age group.

Looking at the bar graph in more detail, it is clear that the percentage of males from Australia who are in 15 to 25 age group is approximately 53% in 2010, compared to females about 48%. In 25 to 34 age group and 35 to 44 age group, the percentage of Australian males who did regular physical exercise in 2010 is about 42% and almost 40%, respectively. These figures for females are nearly 50% and over 50%, respectively.

Turning to the older age groups, it is evident that the percentage of Australian females aged 45 to 54 who did regular physical activiy in 2010 is the highest data of the graph, around 54%. This data is about 52% in 55 to 64 age group and about 47% in 65 and over age group. In 45 to 54 age group, about 43% of males from Australia did regular physical activity in 2010. The percentage of Australian men who did regular physical activity in 2010 is quite close between 55 to 64 age group and 65 and over age group. The figure for the former is approximately 45% and the figure for the latter is about 46%. The figures for males and females in 65 and over are almost the same.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 607, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the figure for the latter is about 46%. The figures for males and females in 65 and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1149.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 260.0 196.424390244 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41923076923 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47315468235 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.373076923077 0.547539520022 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 355.5 283.868780488 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0078880983 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.454545455 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.81818181818 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312012727052 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158045872431 0.103423049105 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122394358493 0.0843802449381 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232668737515 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713239825241 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.36 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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