The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on a 2 groups of workers:those aged from 18- 30 and those aged 45-60 ,and shows factors affecting their work performance.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on a 2 groups of workers:those aged from 18- 30 and those aged 45-60 ,and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The bar chart illustrates 10 different factors affecting work performance and their significance percentages for 18-30 and 45-60 years aged people.

Overall, it can be seen that more factors impact 18-30 aged people’s performance than 45-60 aged people’s. For example, a significant majority of workers aged 18-30 assert that personal development has an influence on performance, while only two-fifths of workers aged 45-60 say the same. Similarly, for younger group of people figures of relaxed working environment and promotion prospects are about 80%, whereas for older ones rates are 30% and 50% respectively.

However, there are some factors that have almost equal proportions among both groups. They are: team spirit and money at around 62%, competent boss and job satisfaction at 50%, and work environment at 25%. there is an exceptional factor. Nearly half of the 45-60 aged workers consider respect from colleagues as a factor affecting work performance, which is 5% greater than 18-30 aged workers’ figure.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: There
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, similarly, so, whereas, while, as for, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 33.7804878049 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56962025316 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00362970081 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.696202531646 0.547539520022 127% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0383961015 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316872962416 0.215688989381 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134698779442 0.103423049105 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906501385813 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237120635021 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285135893141 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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