The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on 2 groups of workers : those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the results of survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on 2 groups of workers : those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The given horizontal chart reveals the information about a survey; which is conducted by a personnel department on two groups of workers : aged from 18-30 and from 45-60, and factors affecting their work performance.

It can be seen that factors mostly affect the work performance of adults as compare to elders. It includes the internal as well as external factors. Team spirit and job satisfaction, both has the same affect on the performance of employees. However, competent boss affect near about 58% while work environment has 30% affect on both: adult and elder workers.

In addition with this, external factors also affect the performance Of the workers. Chance of personal development has more affect on adults whereas it has less affect on elders. Moreover, job security and promotion prospects affect the performance of the adult employees by 45%, 80% respectively, and 22%, 57% respectively on elders.

Overall, it is evident that the internal factors have similar responsed from the two age groups while they had dissimilar responses on the external factors.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, moreover, so, well, whereas, while, in addition, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30994152047 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84120953227 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590643274854 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8425257882 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.888888889 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.23603664747 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259820383647 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100332673897 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13332531744 0.0843802449381 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182638539635 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165547789008 0.0819641961636 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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