the bar chart shows the hours per week the teenagers spend doing certain activities from 2002 to 2007

Essay topics:

the bar chart shows the hours per week the teenagers spend doing certain activities from 2002 to 2007

The bar chart illustrates the number of hours adolescents in Chester spend on seven activities from 2002 to 2007.

Overall, the most popular activity over the period was watching television, while bowling was the least preferred one. Going to pubs/ discos, shopping and watching television all showed an increase in the number of hours teenagers spent on these activities. The other pursuits showed a decrease in activity except watching DVDs which fluctuated.

Teenagers spent 25 hours on watching television which increased to almost 40 hours in the final year. Both going to pubs/ discos and shopping more than doubled over the period from over 5 to over 15 and over 5 to exactly 15 respectively.

While teenagers occupied 10 hours doing homework in 2002, it dropped to over 5 hours in 2007. Bowling was under 5 hours during the entire period reaching a lower point of around 3 hours. The number of hours teenagers dedicated to watching DVDs was 10 hours in the first and final years but reached a peak of over 15 hours during 2004 and 2005.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 881.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9217877095 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53718637285 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519553072626 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6459600409 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.8888888889 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291804247361 0.215688989381 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139252535836 0.103423049105 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124440711266 0.0843802449381 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210255296095 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130797801117 0.0819641961636 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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