Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 5 writing task 1

Essay topics:

Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 5 writing task 1

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian male and female in six age groups who did daily physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of female who did regular exercise was greater than the percentage of male who did regular activity. But in case of the age group (65 and over) the percentage is nearly same. The percentage difference among the two groups showed a trend: percentage difference increased from (15 to 24) group to (35 to 44) group and after that it decreased in the following age groups.

In the youngest group, percentage of male outnumbered the percentage of female by 5.1%, but in the oldest group percentage of female was greater than the percentage of male by 0.5%. After the youngest group the female started to dominate the male and the greatest dominance was in the group (35 to 44) where the percentage of female was 13% higher than their respective counterparts. After their greatest dominance the female percentage started to decrease in the following groups where they beat the women by 9.8% and 7.9% respectably in the group (45 to 64) and (55 to 64).

Votes
Average: 8.2 (5 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80423280423 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72487286176 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433862433862 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.8852864562 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.714285714 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.23603664747 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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