The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart give information about the number of people working in five types of work in Australia from 2001 to 2008.
Overall, it is clear that the number of people employed in five types of work in 2001 of slaws was highest but in 2008 of farming was lowest. However, we can see clear more if we look at the specific figures.
Look at the bar chart in 2001, it can be seen that the number in 2008 and 2001 was stable and the figures are not too disparate I about 150000 and 165000. However, the rate of people choosing accounting in both years have same number about 60000. Meanwhile, the farming was the job had lowest people choosing is 20000.
Look at the bar chart in 2008, remaining two types of work is computing and nursing. Computing is ranked second after sales in terms of highest is 62000 and nursing lowest 10000 but in 2001 this number is stable and have same number is 45000. Finally, we can see that people always choosing working in sales than any other work in Australia.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to account'.
Suggestion: to account
...0. However, the rate of people choosing accounting in both years have same number about 60...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'had the lowest'.
Suggestion: had the lowest
...000. Meanwhile, the farming was the job had lowest people choosing is 20000. Look at the ...
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Line 4, column 291, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to work'.
Suggestion: to work
... we can see that people always choosing working in sales than any other work in Austral...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, look, second, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41304347826 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13583499253 2.65546596893 80% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483695652174 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 228.6 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0252428707 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2222222222 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292806214845 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138744404709 0.103423049105 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126452951772 0.0843802449381 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230953458629 0.15604864568 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124398329881 0.0819641961636 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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