The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in1999.
The chart compares the percentages of five different given qualifications that were obtained by men and women in 1999 in Australia.
Overall, it can be seen that men eclipsed their counterparts in Skilled vocational diploma, Postgraduate diploma and Master's degree, whereas in the remaining two qualifications, females surpassed boys.
To begin with men, the proportion in Skilled vocational diploma, was almost close to 100%, which was the highest net in 1999. This was followed by Postgraduate diploma at about 75%, nearly twice as many as Undergraduate diploma with approximately 35%. Next came Master's degree at exactly three fifths (60%), far higher than Bachelor's degree at roughly half of the total.
Turning to the women, the figure for Undergraduate diploma stood at 72%, as opposed to Skilled vocational diploma at only 9%. The total (9%) was the lowest sum of all awarded degrees. Postgraduate diploma and Master's degree were both below 50%, while Bachelor's degree constituted a little more than the former two accomplishments at 55%.
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flaws:
1. need to compare male with female, not compare it self. see a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-ielts-academic-essays/char…
2. better change this:
Overall, it can be seen that men eclipsed their counterparts in Skilled vocational diploma, Postgraduate diploma and Master's degree, whereas in the remaining two qualifications, females surpassed boys.
to:
As is observed, female were more in numbers in case of undergraduate diploma and bachelor degree while male outnumbered female in all other levels.
to keep it simpler.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 850 1000
No. of Different Words: 101 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.152 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.084 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.442 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Dear sir, i have confusion
Dear sir, i have confusion about comparasions. on what conditions we can compare to oneself or do we have to always compare two contrasts. I reviewed essays by the top users of testbig, but i found some comparing to oneself only while others comparing both genders. Could you please clear the confusion? Thank you sir.
Let's read the requirements
Let's read the requirements first:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
suppose there is only one gender for six categories, for sure we compare oneself.
However, when there are two genders. Yes, we can still compare oneself since it has differences, but how about the differences between two genders? the question here is: which is the main feature? oneself or two genders.
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so the answer is 'It depends on the main features'. Whatever it is good for the main features, it is correct. We didn't see a fixed rule.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 886.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3696969697 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01757326225 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648484848485 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8432209913 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.75 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0966285817303 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516251333861 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833366011778 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895702291546 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101633260175 0.0819641961636 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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