The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below

Essay topics:

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.

The bar chart shows that the proportion of free time activities are participated by children and youth in Australia.Overall, it can be seen that the girls are less participates than boys aggregating all activities percentages.

The biggest activity which is video and Television are watched by boys and girls at 100% while the lowest activity that is rollerblading or skateboarding are played by boys at 40% and girls at below 10% than boys.
Girls who rides a bike and plays computer games are equal and just over a half of all the activities whereas
Boys who rides and plays the same activities at 70 per cent and 80 per cent respectively.

The Art and craft is one of the activity in which there are more girls who participate compare to the boys where the girls take part at just over 50 % and boys at 40%. As we can see that there are 5 leisure activities where we can have significant participation of number boys and girls.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Overall
...ated by children and youth in Australia.Overall, it can be seen that the girls are less...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65662650602 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9151776898 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548192771084 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.3165760474 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.6 112.824112599 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 22.9334400587 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150455562135 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919642473131 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616694131701 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863274652846 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656601839449 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.2329268293 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 11.4329268293 188% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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