The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

Given are pie charts depicting the number of prevailing workers in separate cities through a 50-year period starting from 1960.
It is perceptible that the Manufacturing accounted for the majority of the total working percentage in the first year, while at the end of period, there was a switch in the main percentage to Services in town A.
Opening the period is a dominance of Manufacturing in both towns, accounting for 70 in town B and one fourth in the other town, respectively. But through 40 years, people in 2010 paid less attention to this field but more in other jobs. This made the percentage of Manufacturing work reduce remarkably by 21% in town A while the number was 17% in town B.
On the other hand, the occupation’s trend leaned completely forward to Service at town A, reaching the majority of 64%, almost double of the first figure, but the number of Sales workers was badly reduced by half in contrast . Whereas in town B, although Manufacturing was still the main job trend, people then focused more on the other two jobs, making a small increase in both figures.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, still, then, whereas, while, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74736842105 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76621192266 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589473684211 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7133928484 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.857142857 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.23603664747 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269706610646 0.215688989381 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12726548469 0.103423049105 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064593748821 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155390719576 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761516174098 0.0819641961636 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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