Some people say free time activities for children should be organized (by parents). Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Hitherto, the globalization has led to some disparities in credo of kids’ management, and the question of whether parents should control leisure times of their children or not has been raising public attention. I will discuss both opinions by giving some rational evidences.
First and foremost, it is conspicuous that kids are easily appealed by games and cartoons, so they spend most of their free time steeping in these activities. That is why in some adult cognition, they have to put kids under their tutelage in order not to let their children become addicted. Furthermore, a ready-made routes can increase the performance of kids in studying due to the rational breaking period. Putting a side these benefits, there is a huge drawback of controlling kids too much, and the flexibility is one of them. If children always follow a ready-made route, it means they can get risk of being passive which can affect badly the flexibility in their work in future. What’s more, the compulsory of their parents deters kids from interacting with their friends, shorten their relationship and isolating them from the outside world. A vivid example is that in somewhere of Vietnam, due to the credo that adults always right and an over-control of parents, kid became autism.
On the other hand, letting kids to free in their leisure time are believed to be rational in some places. Children is very vulnerable, so the way parents teach them affect their characteristics a lot. Freedom can give kids a relaxation, and it also shield them from parents’ tutelage which limit kids’ creativity. On top of that this way of teaching can allow children to learn new things from many sources of knowledge such as: books, internet,… In America, children are free in their leisure time, so they can acquire a huge new knowledge, which are very helpful in their career. Although many people lament that their kids can acquire bad things from internet, this is also a chance for kids to learn, an early-open mind can help children to understand fully about the world.
In conclusion, giving kids freedom in free time is obviously better than over-control them
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00278551532 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73064906512 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534818941504 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1753412842 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.733333333 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270265946711 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10268236557 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721546842121 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185521469042 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374450692586 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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