The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts illustrate the school leavers in Australia, what did after finished the secondary education in the years 1980, 1990 and 2000.

Overall, it is apparently seen that the proportion of the students chose to continue their studies further and the percentage of the school leavers stayed-home without a job, have declined over the period while, the employed rate has increased in the three years.

In 1980, half of the students were intend to start tertiary education. However it has declined in to 38% and 37% in 1990 and 2000 respectively. The school leavers, who were unemployed, accounted the lowest in all three years within the range of 8% - 12%.

Noticeably, 40% were employed in 1980 and it has increased by 10% in the next decade (50%). Interestingly, it has been further rose to 55% in 2000 which was the highest rate in both years of 1990 and 2000.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chool leavers stayed-home without a job, have declined over the period while, the...
^^
Line 9, column 36, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'intended'.
Suggestion: intended
... In 1980, half of the students were intend to start tertiary education. However it...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ere intend to start tertiary education. However it has declined in to 38% and 37% in 19...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 126, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'risen'.
Suggestion: risen
...50%. Interestingly, it has been further rose to 55% in 2000 which was the highest ra...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, however, second, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 739.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8940397351 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64126506876 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582781456954 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 198.0 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3855687132 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.571428571 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123440339197 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053890278266 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853910935938 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889858436563 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096892272981 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.