The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by mrwen00 on Tue, 04/02/2019 - 07:24

The bar charts provide the analysis of the weight assessment of inhabitants of Charlestown in 1955 and 2015. Overall, the numbers of overweight and obese persons increased significantly by 20-30% in the age group of 30-39 to 60-69.
In 1955, the youngest age group which both underweight and ideal group took over 95% and only 2-5 percent of people were in overweight and obese. On the other hand, the overweight and obese person tended to increase by 10-20% from the age range 30-39 to 60-69.
By contrast, there was a huge change percentage of overweight and obese which belonged to the group of 30-39 to 60-69, increased rapidly by 20-30% to each age range in 2015. However, the number of youngest age underweight had a mildly decrease by 10% in 2015 comparing to 1955. Otherwise, it is important to note that the underweight of age range from 30-39 to 60-69 reduced by 10-20%.
In general, the charts depict the different changes of weight assessment of inhabitants over four type of weight in 1955 and 2015.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bese person tended to increase by 10-20% from the age range 30-39 to 60-69. By ...
^^
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the youngest'.
Suggestion: of the youngest
... age range in 2015. However, the number of youngest age underweight had a mildly decrease b...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('mildly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
... number of youngest age underweight had a mildly decrease by 10% in 2015 comparing to 1955. Other...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80571428571 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65637469695 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497142857143 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.1750845545 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.125 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101584455867 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065160196481 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763762960282 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895995617405 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541065518429 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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