The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture depicts the process of producing sugar from its raw material (sugarcane).
Overall, sugar is produced after the completion of seven several steps from growing sugar and harvesting it to separating sugar crystal from its syrup.
Firstly, the sugarcane is planted by the farmers which usually takes 12 to 18 months to grow, and after that, it is harvested using machine or farmer themselves. Secondly,the collected sugarcane is then crushed in crushing mill, so that the raw material is converted into its juice. Next, the juice is poured through the limestone filter for purification. As soon as the filtration is done, it is taken to evaporater where the juice is heated in order to convert it into its syrup.
Subsequently, it is then transferred to a centrifugal rotator, which rotates the blades inside it. By then, the syrup is converted into crystalline form. As a result, final product is prepared after drying it and cooled it in the large container. In this way, sugar is manufactured from sugarcane.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rt it into its syrup. Subsequently, it is then transferred to a centrifugal rot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 855.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05917159763 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83258337705 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597633136095 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1885340958 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.23603664747 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144008366611 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609772008778 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807741291338 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11067012391 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643598695364 0.0819641961636 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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