the diagram shows the process for canning pears Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details and making comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

the diagram shows the process for canning pears. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main details and making comparisons where relevant.

Given the diagram which sets out information about the making process of canning pears. At first glance, it is readily obvious that it takes 14 steps to transform fresh pears on trees to be canned pears in delivery.
The process commences when the fruits are picked by hand in the orchids. After being transported and undergo the washing process, workers in the factory check their quality whether there is any bruise on the fruit. Right then, the pears are kept in a 0-celsius degree environment, which is known as the cold-storing. After being cooled, the next stage is when they are weighed and graded on a scale. When all the above-mentioned steps are done, people begin to peel and slice pears to get their skins and seeds removed. Afterward, they move on to the next tread which is canning the fruit in metal cans and later sealing the can via sealing machines. But they cannot be eaten yet as they are about to go through a cooking/ sterilizing process. Ultimately, cans are labeled, stored ad go on despatch to the customers.
To sum up, transforming pears to canned pears is a long and effort-taking process. Moreover, its 14 steps in the making of canned pears are done by both human labor and machines.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, moreover, then, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71830985915 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56881742926 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582159624413 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6310995461 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.75 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138858532305 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536543186389 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465649764311 0.0843802449381 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120345079608 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482339232349 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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