The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagram illustrates the transform of Queen Mary hospital's area in the period of 1960 to 2000.
Overall, the change consists of three stages, beginning in 1960 to ending up in 2000. Definitely, there was a huge adjustment of this area for improvement of function.
In 1960, the hospital was built next to the main road which in front of the car park. the land next to the car park was big farmland which behind the ground where the shopping center possessed.
In 1980, the shopping mall was revoked for the hospital's expanding where the pharmacy and the cancer center were constructed. Moreover, the farmland was replaced by a new nursing school next to the old car park. Thus, this school comprised directly the human resources for the hospital.
In 2000, they decided to decrease the size of the car park by half for moving the nursing school there. Meanwhile, the cancer center was increased significantly by threefold of scale for better treatment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...in road which in front of the car park. the land next to the car park was big farml...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88957055215 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59051213727 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546012269939 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 14.3791515744 43.030603864 33% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.7 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0968162087597 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472299148338 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789397550974 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783622060533 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936437369818 0.0819641961636 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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